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I will remove any disrespectful or nasty posts.

LOL threaten all you want. But this Great Wall of Text needs to be made a LOT shorter so that significant numbers of your target audience might be expected to actually read it. LEOs don't have endless time on their hands.

As a former editor, I know it's hard, but less is more. Squeeze maximum impact from every word. If it takes a raft of paragraphs to get an idea across, then the idea is too complex to be absorbed in a forum like this by your intended readers. (That doesn't apply to things like books, which the reader expects to invest considerable time in reading.)

Just a suggestion, don't shoot the messenger :)

2 years ago
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