My contribution to the next campfire sing-a-long
(media.greatawakening.win)
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I know what people (mostly you) were saying about the meter (other verses had 8 syllables followed by 8 syllables).
What I proposed was 8 syllables followed by 7 syllables, which allowed "go through" to be sang together in the same verse.
I suggested this because I had sung it to myself and found my brain instinctively rushing to try to fit "go through" into that second to last verse.
If you look at the way the original op wrote it down, there was no comma between "go" and "through" denoting the separation of the verses, like he had done with all the previous verses he presented. It was left up to the reader to find the separation.
Do you suppose maybe he hadn't put a comma in there because even he had a natural tendency to want to pair "go" and "through" together? Kind of curious, though, to say the least.
I have no problem engaging in a long spirited debate....even about the most mundane of things....but only if it is done in good faith.
But when the other party starts to resort to snide little insults to try to make their point, I go all out nuclear in insulting them back.
It's only the internet, and the way things go I will probably see something you post later and praise and upvote you.
I think the whole “go through” issue is a you problem.
I think a comma certainly would have helped you, but for anyone else seeing the fact that “will go” rhymes with “dildo” makes the version much easier, cleaner, smoother, and better. Your version is clunky and awkward